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eureka fic: Okay, No... or Yes.

Fandom: Eureka
Title: Okay, No... or Yes.
Pairing: Stark/Carter
Rated: NC-17ish
Notes: Heee. Okay, this was just me trying to get their voices. It's my whole "first I write a tiny nonsense fic to see if I have their voices before I try to write a real one" thing. Lemme tell you... FUN.

[ okay yes... or no ]


It’s all laughing and joking and realizing maybe he’s been judging Nathan too hard until Nathan steps forward and grabs the belt loops of his pants. “I was wondering when it’d come down to this.”

“Come down to…” Jack pauses, looking down at the way Nathan’s tanned hands clash with the khaki of his uniform. He realizes with a jolt two things: One, Nathan’s fingers are running small soft paths along the rim of his pants, and two, Jack’s hard. “Um. Uhum, I think you…” He jerks back out of Nathan’s hold. “I think you might’ve gotten the wrong idea.”

“Have I,” Nathan asks, and it’s that same damn infuriating holier-than-thou, smarter-than-everyone tone that he’s always used, that’s always made Jack’s hands curl into fists, except this time his cock twitches in interest, and what the freakin’ hell is that about?

“I uh, we uh…” Jack motions helpless between them, realizing that he’s backing himself into the corner only when he actually has. “This can’t… I can’t…”

“Can’t or won’t,” Nathan asks, voice dipping low as he crowds Jack into the tight space, hands reaching out once again to clasp onto Jack’s hips.

The fingers spread out and Nathan slides them down to cup Jack’s ass, bringing them closer together. “Oh… kay. Um. This isn’t. No. No, no, and uhh… yeah, no,” Jack says, shaking his head vehemently. “Not happening. This is another Eureka-type catastrophe. You’ve been exposed to some sort of… gay-making… horny-making… particle… manipulationing… thing, and--”

“Nope,” Nathan says, stepping even closer still, pressing his body into Jack’s. “This is all me, Carter.”

“Sheriff,” Jack whispers, really, really meaning to have said that louder and with more bravado. “Sheriff, you call me Sheriff, not Carter, remember? Remember how you always call me Sheriff, because it dehumanizes me and it means you don’t have to be jealous and whatever me and Allison…” He looks up then, eyes widening. “Allison! Allison, remember her? Your wife? The one I have a thing for? Remember how you hate me for that?”

Nathan smiles and somehow what used to make Jack Carter madder than anything is now turning him into a rubbery weak-kneed mess. “Never hated you, Carter. Hated the fact that Allison didn’t want me anymore, but you… you’re kind of impossible to hate.” His grin widens. “Which actually does make me despise you a little bit, but that’s just the ego talking.”

“See,” Jack says animatedly, jerking a finger up to point in Nathan’s face. “Despise! You don’t… you don’t seduce people you despise!”

“I don’t know whether you do or not, but it seems like I kind of am,” Nathan says, pressing a knee between Jack’s legs. Jack lets out a helpless whimper and hates himself for it because it makes Nathan’s eyes darken which just makes him even more irresistible. Nathan rubs his thigh against Jack’s and leans in closer, whispering in his ear. “And like I said, that was my ego talking. My id wants to know what you sound like when you come.”

“Oh, holy fuck,” Jack moans, thunking his head against the wall behind him. “Jesus.”

“Well sure, but you can just call me Nathan if you want. Stark if it makes you more comfortable.”

And the thing is Jack’s always kind of had a giggle at the thought that Nathan’s last name was Stark, because it makes him think naked. It was funny because… well, Jack can’t quite remember why it was funny even just this morning because right now it’s the hottest thing he’s ever thought.

“Maybe I was exposed to some sort of thing that makes me irresistible,” he mutters as Nathan starts nibbling at his neck, Jack’s fingers involuntarily digging into Nathan’s hips. He really hadn’t meant to tug him closer, but that seems to be what is happening. “Some kind of gas, or liquid, or… or… something…”

“Hmm,” Nathan hums against his throat, making his skin tingle. “Maybe. If so, it’s working quite nicely.”

“Right,” Jack says, fingers clawing into Nathan’s shirt as Nathan presses his knee even more forcefully into him. “So this shouldn’t be happening. Because… because I’m not gay, and you’re not gay, and we hate each other, and… and…”

“The thing is, Carter, is that there’s that saying that says there’s a thin line between love and hate,” Nathan says, tugging at the bottom of Jack’s shirt and untucking it, his hand delving up under the shirt to touch Jack’s bare skin, and oh, god, his hand is warm and soft. “And I might not be gay but I am a scientist, which means I’m willing to test any possible hypothesis, and right now I hypothesize that if you fuck half as well as you bicker I’m in for a really good time.”

Jack’s eyes roll back in his head and he just barely manages to hold onto the train of thought that says this is a Very Bad Idea. “But--”

“And,” Nathan says, sliding his hand back down Jack’s stomach, over his waistband, and rubbing over his cock a few times. Jack can feel the smile across his jawline. “You’re hard.”

“Nathan… Stark…”

“Carter?”

Jack blinks, looking at him. “Huh?”

Nathan grins. “Shut up and just enjoy it.”

“Yeah,” Jack sighs as Nathan’s fingers work deftly at unbuttoning and unzipping his pants. “Okay.”

Comments

( 31 comments — Leave a comment )
athos_silvanus
Sep. 3rd, 2007 02:26 pm (UTC)
Sweet merciful crap. PLEASE continue this, you've got them just right! Fantastic!!
amyordinary
Sep. 3rd, 2007 02:31 pm (UTC)
I'm with athos... please continue! It's wonderful so far!
blackpsychi
Sep. 3rd, 2007 02:48 pm (UTC)
I'm a puddle of goo after that. Nice job!
wornoutbirks
Sep. 3rd, 2007 02:48 pm (UTC)
Dude...I am in awe of how well you have them written. Their characters are spot-on! Write more! Please?!
wpadmirer
Sep. 3rd, 2007 03:07 pm (UTC)
I'd say you got the voices very well indeed.

WP
aphelant
Sep. 3rd, 2007 05:08 pm (UTC)
You’ve been exposed to some sort of… gay-making… horny-making… particle… manipulationing… thing

That's so totally Jack! WIN.

*kicks feet with glee*
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jessicalynn8383
Sep. 3rd, 2007 06:26 pm (UTC)
Sweet holy mother of Moses... *melts into a pile of goo*

“Oh… kay. Um. This isn’t. No. No, no, and uhh… yeah, no,” Jack says, shaking his head vehemently. “Not happening. This is another Eureka-type catastrophe. You’ve been exposed to some sort of… gay-making… horny-making… particle… manipulationing… thing, and--”

--- I officially love how you write Jack, that was just fantastic. I can't decide which phrase makes me laugh more, "gay-making" or "horny-making". And hey, they could be bi! :}

“Nope,” Nathan says, stepping even closer still, pressing his body into Jack’s. “This is all me, Carter.”

--- Oh. My. God. I could practically hear Nathan purring this, that line killed me. So spot on with the sexy!seductive!Nathan.

The whole chunk starting with "Sheriff" down to "My id wants to know what you sound like when you come."

--- I loved your babbling Jack and then I just stared at the screen slack-jawwed at Nathan's "id" comment, who knew psychology could make gorgeous foreplay?

“Oh, holy fuck,” Jack moans

--- I second that, Jack ...

“Well sure, but you can just call me Nathan if you want. Stark if it makes you more comfortable.”

--- *hysterical giggling*

“Maybe. If so, it’s working quite nicely.”

--- Heehee, I heart your Nathan.

All in all I think this is a great piece. You captured they're dynamic just right, and you wrote a great funny, sexy piece without going to straight the pr0n. I mean that stuff is fun, but I love stories with a little build up and back-story, so kudos to you! Plus, I love that you kind of did a "fade to black" instead of giving all the details because to me, a little mystery is a good (hot!) thing. I really hope you write more fics, I enjoy your take on them. :} And we always need more Nathan\Jack fics, so thank you so much for sharing! Hope this wasn't too long, lol.
calicomary
Sep. 3rd, 2007 06:50 pm (UTC)
*regains composure*
I believe you have succeeded in fulfilling your stated goal of getting Carter and Stark's voices right. The only thing I have to say is: unless they're going to have sex the whole time (and there's nothing wrong with that) you might want to see if you can write so "regular" snarking between Carter and Stark.
*fans self*
just_reed
Sep. 7th, 2007 04:17 am (UTC)
Question: Who is your icon a picture of?
bsgnightsky
Sep. 3rd, 2007 07:00 pm (UTC)
*Is quite glad she randomly joined marshal_science*

Ignoring the fact I suddenly like Jack/Nathan more than I should (though, to be fair, Nathan would probably be hot with a tree or something), this fic? *Really* good. You've got their voices down perfectly.

“And like I said, that was my ego talking. My id wants to know what you sound like when you come.”

<-- That just slayed me. DUDE.
telperion_15
Sep. 3rd, 2007 08:00 pm (UTC)
Okay, so I'm new to this fandom (although not the show) and this pairing (which officially makes me a Very Stupid Person), and so I'm pretty much devouring any Jack/Nathan stories I can find. And this one is a great additon to the list. You've got the character voices nailed really well, and it was hot, hot, hot!

And the thing is Jack’s always kind of had a giggle at the thought that Nathan’s last name was Stark, because it makes him think naked.

Heehee ;-)

guinny_hamilton
Sep. 3rd, 2007 08:33 pm (UTC)
The awesomeness that is this story cannot be put into words.

More. Now.

*growls*

...

*peeks around corner to see if threatening posture is working*
curgypsy
Sep. 4th, 2007 12:34 am (UTC)
If this is a 'tiny nonsense fic', I can't wait to see what you consider a 'real one'. This was great.
shadowgardens
Sep. 4th, 2007 02:24 am (UTC)
That was really good and you are so evil for ending it right there. You've got the characters dead on.
burningchaos
Sep. 4th, 2007 03:36 am (UTC)
Yum....perfect voices and seriously hot.
ladysire253
Sep. 4th, 2007 06:24 am (UTC)
NOOOOOOO!!!!!
You stopped you weren’t suppose to stop. That’s evil. EVIL!!!!!
lurkerlynne
Sep. 5th, 2007 05:15 am (UTC)
::giggles:: Lovely!

Damn the fact it's a family show!

Eureka and Doctor Who both! Hell, I'd pay for an adult SciFi channel. Guys, a word.....
tiki_92090
Sep. 5th, 2007 06:39 am (UTC)
OMG
I lOVE YOU!!


BEST EUREKA ONE-SHOT EVER!!!!!!

Love the Freaked!Jack and the CoolAndCollected!Nathan

Thanks for writing an awesome one-shot (Well I hope it isn't a one-shot, MORE!!!)
blaidd_drwg
Sep. 5th, 2007 08:25 am (UTC)
Whoot! *fans self* More please. Forget UST, in the words of "So You Think You Can Dance"'s Mary Murphy "You're on the hot tamale train!!"

I love predatory!Nathan and stammering-secretly can't wait to give in!Jack. I just need Nathan to nibble on Jack's ear and maybe whisper a few sweet nothings, heck maybe some neck nibbling too, and I'll proclaim you the best N/J author ever. :-D
blaidd_drwg
Sep. 5th, 2007 08:56 am (UTC)
Just finished reading dvoid_03's 4 part 'Kinda Like that Movie with Sandra Bulllock'. While your story isn't that long...yet (hint), I think you capture their voice even better. I look forward to more of your prose.
jakrar
Sep. 5th, 2007 07:06 pm (UTC)
Wonderfully cute and awesomely hot, and I'm hoping for more Nathan/Jack tales from you very, very soon! *gives you puppy-eyes*
spock74
Sep. 6th, 2007 01:41 am (UTC)
Oh. Love. Yes. Yum. Happy.

Yeah, kinda incoherent, here. Good job!
just_reed
Sep. 7th, 2007 04:14 am (UTC)
Stark Naked! omg, now I can't NOT think of it that way. (nice)

I loved your voices, totally right on. Your Nathan is all smoldering heat and warm trickly feelings in the groin area, and Carter's very much a horny little mush puddle. (very nice)

I've gotta say kudos to you, friend. That was the shit.

P.S. "Sheriff, you call me Sheriff." Yeah, in /bed/! *pervvy thought explosion*
sheepfairy
Sep. 9th, 2007 05:10 pm (UTC)
I liked this so much! I mean, guh it was just so incredibly hot.
arabella_hope
Sep. 15th, 2007 12:42 am (UTC)
OOO, this is good. I love how you've captured them - Jack's stammering is perfect and cocky (hee!) Nathan. OH YES.
lazaefair
Jan. 20th, 2008 07:50 am (UTC)
I'm so late to the fandom and scrambling to catch up on all the Jack/Nathan material...all I have to say to this fic is, MOAR. NEEDS MOAR JACK/NATHAN.
Not to put any pressure on you or anything, perhaps you have moved on from this fandom, but I was seriously disappointed when I clicked your eureka fic tag and this was the last thing you'd written. You're a fantastic writer - foreplay snark is extremely hard to produce correctly, especially in-character foreplay snark.
skyearth85
Jul. 20th, 2008 02:25 pm (UTC)
hot, hot @ç@
omglawdork
Aug. 4th, 2008 06:15 pm (UTC)
So, what? It wasn't enough to use your nefariously awesome, snarky little ficlets to get me watching SGA? Now you have to suck me into Eureka, too?

right now I hypothesize that if you fuck half as well as you bicker I’m in for a really good time

Oh. My. Sweet. Baby. Jesus. Seriously - I love your Stark. And that's saying something, because I love Nathan Stark, and getting his particular brand of bastard-but-not-really down is something I'm pretty picky about.
eboniorchid
Aug. 25th, 2008 09:18 am (UTC)
So ... considering that that was one of the hottest and likely the most in-character Eureka fics I've ever read, I am deeply saddened by the fact that this seems to be your only Eureka fic. Did I miss others? Can I bribe them out of hiding? *mooshes chocolate into the screen*
ellex42
Sep. 2nd, 2008 01:32 am (UTC)
Bwah-ha=ha-ha-ha!

Yes, please. I want some more?

(I especially like the word "manipulationing".)
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